A Story About My Uncle 1.1

I was a baby boy born into an upcoming village. My mother ran around with me for a bit before reaching a farm. She looked at her sister and asked “Should we keep this one?” Not even thinking of me as a person. After a short inspection my aunt said “No.” and so my mother tried to carry me off into the wilderness, but I would have none of it! I crawled over to a nice little hot spot by the farm and sat there, and glared at them. They were sure I’d die so they just left me there.
As I had just gotten to my sitting space my mother got a girl, she was immediately named and cared for by both my mother and aunt. I couldn’t help but feel a bit bad, I was tossed aside struggling to survive at the age on 2 while she got everything served to her on a silver platter. But I would show them, I’d live til 60!
I was fed twice during my childhood, once by my mother trying to abandon me and once by my kind uncle who saw me and fed me a carrot. But I made it into toddlerhood and I was ready to take on the world! It was clear that my mother and aunt despised me for surviving so I didn’t want to be anywhere near them. But as soon as I saw their horrible job at farming I just had to fix it. My mother was using some sort of “feather system” where she’d put a feather over the designated seed area that nobody cared about half the time. I could see my mothers spite in her eyes as I suggested growing the seeds on the side instead of using this seemingly random feather. She just looked at me, put down her tools, took a basket and started walking around doing nothing after I said that. God knows why.
Time went by and we all got older, my mother and aunt and the smiths faded away. It was just me, my sister and one of the nice smiths left. My sister had started having children and I treated them all like my own to make up for my own childhood. It was then I gave myself the name Carl, for convenience sake because it’s much easier to say Carl than Farming uncle. I got 2 little helpers in my farm, Lil Missy 1 (I think her name was saturn?) and Lil Missy 2 (Jupiter I think) I developed a special crazy uncle bond with them, too bad Lil Missy 1 had to go and die on us.
Time in the farm went quickly and so did we. Time took its toll on me and my sister and soon we were old farts trying to make the best of our time. I told the children about my story of abandonment and seemed very understanding.
And so my final hour struck, I died happy amongst my family, being able to spit my mother in the face down in hell gave great joy and hope for the afterlife. My last words were going to be “The odds were against me but I survived” but they ended up being Hmmmm instead. I guess ol farmer men can’t have them nice last words, eh?

Here’s the family tree;

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Reviewer:Kingsif (talk·contribs) 01:41, 2 February 2020 (UTC)

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Style[edit]

  • Lead fair length for article
  • The lead sentence The game was 're-developed professionally' after the collaboration with Coffee Stain Studios. either needs a citation for the quotation or, preferably, to rephrase. If it's not an actual quotation, remove the marks.
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Done

  • The 'brilliant scientist' needs a citation - refs can come at the end of a block of sentences if it's just information being sourced, but all quotes must be directly supported by their source

Done

  • Do 'waste disposal system' and 'waste disposal dimension' really warrant quotation marks?

Done

And when you visit their wall you’ll see that nine different images combined to show one single image. Now, select the grid number and click on the share button. You might have seen it a couple of times like how people post nine different images on their Instagram timeline. . They’re nothing but big pictures, banner pictures or grid (dividing the Instagram photo into small pieces). 2.3

  • The Gameplay section has a lot about the introduction to the world cutscene, which isn't really the gameplay.

Done

  • In my ce of the section, I've added a 'who?' tag to an instance of 'he' - it's not clear if this is the narrator or the uncle.

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Done

  • Needs some inline attribution for the 'playing with gravity' quotation - i.e. write in the sentence who said that and why they're important in terms of the game's dev

Done

  • The article have different things in AmEng and BritEng, could it be standardised to one or the other - I'd recommend BritEng for proximity and similarity to Sweden.

Done

  • I'll add a note here to say that some of the corrections to quotations in the reception look small but the nature of the mistake suggests a major gap in the grasp of English of someone making such errors - cutting them off halfway, leaving out parts of a noun phrase so it's nonsense, misinterpreting a critic statement, leaving out the actual criticism in the quote..

Done

  • Needs attention - I've done a ce, but there are questions and suggestions above for things

Coverage[edit]

  • Maybe more on gameplay - what does the player have to do (blow up rocks?) and what is the game's aim (rescue the uncle?) - what are the controls, do they differ on different consoles, etc.

Done

  • One source says it's a puzzle platformer, does this deserve inclusion?
this says the game is not a puzzle platformer. ~~ CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 09:48, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
  • Needs attention

Illustration[edit]

  • Copyright gameplay image of first person perspective may not be fair use: it doesn't add anything to the reader's understanding of first person perspective, a common element

Removed

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  • Reception box seems unnecessary with only one rated review

Removed

  • Same with the accolades table, with only one nomination

Removed

  • Infobox and cover image good
  • Needs attention

Neutrality[edit]

  • Fine
  • Pass

Stability[edit]

  • Clean history and talk
  • Pass

Verifiability[edit]

  • Sources look good
  • In-line citations good except those needed at quotations, mentioned above
  • Pass

Copyright[edit]

  • Some close paraphrasing outside of quotations from here/ here and here/ here; also, some things directly quoted from these sources can easily be said in your own words, and may read better if done so (look at the right column for the things in the article that have been flagged - small phrases and the game title are fine - and see how they can be rewritten)

Done

  • Otherwise, check seems fine
  • Question of copyright gameplay image above
  • Needs attention
on hold Kingsif (talk) 02:37, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
Kingsif, done. ~~ CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 09:48, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
With one last copyedit, fair. Kingsif (talk) 13:18, 2 February 2020 (UTC)

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